Thursday, February 4, 2016

Summary Response about Ben Franklin

Mallory Gueller
2-3-16
3rd

Benjamin Franklin in 1759 acknowledged the fact that the right to freedom exceeds temporary safety, and that those who give up their freedoms for safety deserve nothing in the end.

Benjamin Franklin incorrectly portrays the idea that freedom is more important than temporary safety because privacy is an essential liberty that Americans have chosen to given up. Here’s an example of how he is incorrect. After 9/11, the people gave up our freedoms for a safety that has lasted for almost fifteen years. In an article on PBS Newshour, Jason Villemez states, “The decade after the 9/11 attacks reshaped many facets of life in America. Some changes were temporary — an immediate response out of concern for our safety — while some proved to be more lasting transformations in American life.” He is talking about the freedoms we gave up for a lasting safety. He then goes on to say how these transformations have shaped our safety, making us a better country even after the loss of our freedom. We are safe because of these transformations that made our life safe and worth living. Some may argue that not only does it violate our morals as Americans, but the privacy invasions do not seem to have made an intense impact. An article on NSA’s surveillance cameras highlighted, “the contribution of NSA’s bulk surveillance programs to these cases was minimal” (Sternman, International Security). Sternman proves that the temporary safety we are ditching our American rights for is not overly effective and in no way overpowers the liberty and privacy citizens have always known. Those who are willing to give up America’s well deserved rights of freedom in order to have limited protection are not taking advantage of what it means to be a U.S. citizen. However, that is not correct. A common view is that temporary safety is necessary for the well-being of our society, and this makes sense because invasions of privacy such as security cameras and cell phone searches have the ability to catch criminals or terrorists. The lack of privacy may lead America to becoming one of the safest place to live. Benjamin Franklin incorrectly portrays the balance of importance between safety and freedom because Americans exercised their freedom by choosing to give it up.

Monday, October 5, 2015

Summary Response Outline of Act 5 of Othello


Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea: Act five of the play “Othello”, by William Shakespeare, correctly depicts how betrayal invades one’s mind.
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas: Throughout the play, Iago is wrecking everyone’s lives because he felt betrayed by Othello, but he’s not the only one. Othello is rage driven by the possibility that the two most important people in his life have a possibility of an affair; he even strangled his wife in an “avenging” act. Emilia, hearing her dying mistress, instantly accuses Othello of murdering her when even Desdemona dictates his innocence.
  • Explanation of ideas: All of the people who acted out of emotion have one thing in common, betrayal
    • Concluding sentence: restate main idea: The fifth act of William Shakespeare’s “Othello” clearly illustrates the emotional power of betrayal.
  • .
Response:

  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and _____________: The final act of “Othello” by William Shakespeare presents how profoundly betrayal by can affect the actions of people.
  • Claim 1:
  • Set-up: Right after Roderigo is killed and Cassio is very wounded, Othello retreats to his bedroom where earlier he had sent his wife. Fueled by the so called anger of betrayal, he awakes her and proceeds to tell her to admit her sins. She claims to be faithful and tells him that Cassio must have just found her handkerchief.
  • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       ): Angrily, he responds, “Yes, presently: Therefore confess thee freely of thy sin; For to deny each article with oath; Cannot remove nor choke the strong conception That I do groan withal. Thou art to die” (Shakespeare 5.2.3364-3368)
  • Explanation of quotation to prove claim: Othello is telling her that the betrayal of her oath and denying of her sins is a crime that should be punished by death. He, being fueled by betrayal, refused to listen to Desdemona.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, ....
  • Set-up: However, one could say that jealousy mainly fuels the actions of the characters.
  • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       ): Iago convinces Roderigo that the way to capture Desdemona’s heart is to end Cassio. Roderigo, jealous of anyone who has a better love life with Desdemona than him, agrees to this plan, and decrees, “I have no great devotion to the deed; And yet he hath given me satisfying reasons:'Tis but a man gone. Forth, my sword: he dies” (Shakespeare 5.1.3144-3146).
  • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: Roderigo explains since Cassio has Desdemona’s heart, he has given him a reason to kill him. Roderigo is acting upon his jealousy.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?
  • Many may believe that jealousy is the main stimulus, but that is not the case. If Othello was jealous of Cassio, he probably would have rathered kill Cassio with his own two hands rather than Desdemona, but he didn’t, instead he let Iago kill Cassio and killed Desdemona himself, proving he was hurt worse  from Desdemona than Cassio. To Othello, the betrayal hurt more than jealousy.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea: William Shakespeare's “Othello” Act Five proves that betrayal dominates one’s life.

Friday, September 18, 2015

Othello Act 2 Summary Response Outline by Tessa Duryea and Mallory Gueller

Summary Response Outline


Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
In the second act of the play Othello penned by William Shakespeare, causes the reader consider the fact of how jealousy can rule one’s life and actions.
  • Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas
Iago, one of the main characters is portrayed as someone who is able to manipulate people into thinking the worst of everyone. He does this because Othello who is a “moor” had made Cassio, a great arithmetic who isn’t a soldier, his lieutenant. As the audience later sees, Iago uses Roderigo, and his wife Emilia as chess pieces in his master plan to get revenge on Othello. Iago is not willing to stop until he has made not only to remove Cassio from his position, but to make Othello’s wife look dishonest and unfaithful.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
After watching and reading the second act of Othello drafted by William Shakespeare captures the fact that jealousy is able to rule one’s life and actions if they allow it to.


Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb,correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays___________ because ___________ .
The second act of Othello written by William Shakespeare, precisely identifies that jealousy can rule one’s life, because Iago wastes all his time destroy everyone’s life using exact detail.  
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up Once everyone is in Cyprus, Iago and Cassio are assigned to guard-duty. They have time before they are expected to report, and Iago plans how to get Cassio to ruin his reputation. Before he left, Cassio had just revealed to Iago he is a lightweight drinker.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (Shakespeare 1.2.13-17). Iago plots, “ If I can fasten but one cup upon him, With that which he hath drunk tonight already,  He'll be as full of quarrel and offence   As my young mistress' dog. Now, my sick fool Roderigo, Whom love hath turn'd almost the wrong side out, To Desdemona hath tonight carous'd  Potations pottle-deep; and he's to watch:    Three lads of Cyprus, noble swelling spirits, That hold their honors in a wary distance, The very elements of this warlike isle,   Have I tonight fluster'd with flowing cups,   And they watch too. Now, 'mongst this flock of drunkards, Am I to put our Cassio in some action  That may offend the isle.—But here they come:If consequence do but approve my dream, My boat sails freely, both with wind and stream” (Shakespeare 2.3.49-66).
This explains to the audience that Iago means to embarrass Cassio in front of everyone by using his alcohol weakness. If his plan goes correctly Iago’s dream of becoming lieutenant will be fulfilled.
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim: explain quote, connect to claim
  • Counterclaim 1: However, ....
However, one can argue that Iago cares for the people and has a feeling of remorse.
    • Set-up
After Cassio is removed from his position people can clearly see that Iago seems to be trying to help Cassio find a way to regain Othello’s praise.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
As the audience can see, Iago is able to care for Cassio and is trying to help him get Othello’s praise back. As Iago speaks to Cassio he says “I protest, in the sincerity of love and honest kindness” (2.3.346-347).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: explain quote, connect to claim
This quote shows that Iago cares for Cassio and believes that he is honest and loving. Iago can be seen as remorseful and caring for the people that he tries to ruin their lives.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? (use rebuttal progression language)
1st step: Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like…
At first glance people may think that Iago is having a prick of remorse for those that he is trying to ruin.


2nd step: Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like...
We cannot deny that Iago is called honest and good, so some may say that Iago is not as evil as he may seem.


3rd step: Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like...
However, it is more complicated than that. When the reader closely examines the facts, they can see that Iago has many “masks” to wear when around a certain person. For example, with Othello he seems to speak only the truth and manipulates Othello into thinking the worst of Cassio by his words. Cassio believes Iago to be good and honest because he honestly thinks that Iago is trying to help him gain Othello’s praise once again. Iago’s jealousy for Cassio, drives Iago to using everyone he sees as a chess  piece and how he can use them to ruin everyone’s life.


  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
William Shakespeare’s “Othello” Act 2 demonstrates how jealousy can rule one’s life.

Thursday, September 10, 2015

Summary Response of Act One of "Othello'' by Tessa Duryea and Mallory Gueller

Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
The first act of William Shakespeare’s “Othello” undoubtedly illustrates that not everyone is who say they are.
  • Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas
In the first act, the reader clearly sees that Iago’s only purpose in the story is to get revenge at Othello for making him an ensign instead of a lieutenant, like Cassio.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
In the first act, William Shakespeare depicts the masks  that Iago wears around different people, in order to get revenge from the perceived betrayal from Othello.
Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays) because
The first act in Othello written by William Shakespeare correctly acknowledges Iago’s revenge plot against Othello, because he is truly himself only when he is alone.  

  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
When Iago is by himself, his true self is clearly visible to the reader.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
As the reader sees Iago’s true self is revealed when everyone left him alone at the end of act 1. Iago express his true feelings when he says “He holds me well. The better shall my purpose work on him. Cassio’s a proper man. Let me see how: To get his place and plume up my will. In double knavery-How? how?- Let’s see. After some time, to abuse Othello’s [ear] That he is too familiar  with his wife. He hath a person and a smooth dispose To be suspected, frame make women false. The Moor is of free and open nature That thinks that me are honest but seem to be so, And will as tenderly be led by th’ nose as asses are,” (Shakespeare 1-3-433-445).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
This shows that iago is able to pretend to be his true self with Roderigo to use him for both money and someone to place the blame on. Iago is also able to make Othello believe that he isn’t a bad person by acting like his best friend.
  • Counterclaim 1: However,  some may insist that Iago shows his true self around Rodrigo.
    • Set-up
As Rodrigo obtains the knowledge of Othello’s union to Desdemona, he seeks comfort with Iago.    
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )Iago informs Rodrigo of his woes, claiming that, “O sir, content you, I follow him to serve my term upon him…” (Shakespeare 1.1 44-45)
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim  Iago essentially lets Rodrigo in on his rebuttal to this treachery.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? (use rebuttal progression language)
At first glance many believe that Iago is genuinely interested in Rodrigo’s love life. We cannot deny that he does indeed help Rodrigo out, but it is more complex than that. Iago is putting on many masks around different people in order to be able to use them. At the end of the first act, he gives a long monologue about how he made a fool his purse.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
The first act play Othello by William Shakespeare, confirms that when Iago is alone, it is the only time in which he is truly himself.

Monday, August 31, 2015

Summary Response of "Bully" by Tessa and I



Summary:
After watching the movie Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch, the movie presents the idea that bullying can lead to thoughts or actions of suicide. All the victims interviewed were tired of being bullied day by day that they had many thoughts of suicide and those thoughts were transferred into actions for few. The parents of suicidal children illustrated that their kids had dealt with terrible bullying before they took their lives. Throughout the movie, the director visibly shows how children and teens can be driven to try or commit suicide due to bullying. Not all of the children were physically bullied; however all of them were verbally bullied. After watching all the interviews of the children and the parents, the director Lee Hirsch is able to show the audience how bullying can lead thoughts or actions of suicide.


Response:
Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch, portrays that bullying in fact can lead to decisions to take one’s life because of the verbal abuse that they endure day after day, and the children or teens are tired of dealing with it. Bullies want to make others feel bad about themselves to make the bullies feel better. During the interview with Ty Smalley’s friend, the people that are trying to fight in become the bullies. Alex sees his friends are the people that bully him and call him the “b” word and try to strangle him. Alex even dictates, “They punch me in the jaw, strangle me, knock things out of my hand, sit on me, and take things from me­”. As the audience sees a scene on the bus with Alex, the other children push him around, knock things out of his hands, sit on him, take things of his, and strangling him. The bus driver sees everything through the mirror and does nothing about it. The people that bully others, they are only doing it to feel good about them and to show others that they are stronger than the kid that they are bullying. However, some kids understand that they are bullied are willing to stand up for themselves and not allow the bullies to win the fight. Kelby, one of the students interviewed, came out gay and she is made fun of daily at school. Her friends are also made fun of because the other kids think that they are gay as well. Each one of the students is not willing to give up easily on what they believe to be correct. Devon was able to end the bullying by standing up for himself for the bullies to leave him alone. As Kelby was interviewed she made the comment “If I leave, then they win” (Kelby). Kelby and Devon are able to stand up for themselves to not allow the bullies to win the fight. Both of them were able to stand for themselves and for what they believe. At first glance, many may believe that that the bullies actually care for the people that they bully. We cannot deny the fact the Cole’s bully, shakes hands with Cole because the principal told him to. This shows that the bully is indeed willing to shake hands over a disagreement.However, it is more complicated than that because each bully only shakes hands or says things to satisfy the teacher or principal's wants.  With each student and parents, the school should have a safe and fun atmosphere. No school can be perfect; however for the two students that committed suicide the teachers do not think that bullying is the reason that the student committed suicide. The movie Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch displays the idea that bullying can lead to thoughts or actions of suicide.is able to show the audience that bullying others can lead to thoughts or actions of suicide.

Tuesday, August 18, 2015

My Semester Goal

By the end of this semester, I want to have gotten an A on a writing assignment. I am a severely unsure writer, and I never know how to judge my writing. I love to write, but never know if it's good. My commitment is to conference with Smith after every writing assignment to learn from my mistakes and gain more confidence, and eventually let my friends read my writing.